Wednesday, March 10, 2010

The Eyes Have It -- writing tip

You might want to watch how you use eyes. I have seen printed stories, where eyes "slid up and down" someone else's body, "dropped into a coffee cup," and "rolled around the floor." Good editors catch such phrases, as with few exceptions eyes, of anatomical necessity, remain inside one's head. People with little compassion and a mean sense of humor make cruel fun of "wandering eyes." Sometimes you can substitute "gaze," "glance," or "look."

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