Monday, May 12, 2014

Plot question

Shannon Delaney Paranormal Series, Vol.6

A GHOST OF BROTHER JONATHAN’S takes Shannon Delaney on a cold-case quest to investigate a mystery surrounding one of California’s legendary shipwrecks… of 150 years ago: “More questions? Have at it,” Marta said. Marta’s blue eyes glittered with excitement.


Question from the E-mail:  Been awhile since I was in your workshop, but...  Remember that Triple O plot thingy.  Do you still have the info on it?  Rosa.

Answer:  Sure do!

      Triple O Plot Outline

Every story is about someone who wants something and whether they get it or not.  Any story plot can easily be broken down into three parts: Objective; Obstacles; Outcome, sometimes referred to as the Triple-O Outline. There are hardly any new plots, so don’t be discouraged if “it’s been done.” The challenge for any writer is to make the characters so fresh and interesting that the reader forgets they have seen the plot before.

Plots for short stories should be short. If too much action is incorporated, the story will grow longer and longer and may become unwieldy. If too many obstacles occur, the reader could grow impatient and give up.

Be careful not to confuse “back story” (information needed to explain the characters personality and problems to the readers), with current plot action. Whatever has happened before the real action begins is “back story”.  Be careful not to confuse explanatory action, with a plot turning point. A plot turning point is always when something CHANGES.

To use a classic example, in the story Cinderella her mother’s death and her father’s remarriage are all “back story”. The mean way the rest of the family treats Cindy is explanatory action used to set up the objective. Because the Objective for Cinderella, is that she wants to go to the ball. Until Cinderella decides she wants to go to the ball nothing has really happened, everything is going on as usual. Remember, plot always happens when something changes. When the character knows what he or she wants, that is the objective and the objective is always  the beginning of the story, the beginning of the plot. Now the character has a problem to solve – how to get what s/he wants. Once there is a problem statement, it’s time to get on with the story.

If there is no problem, nothing is happening, and there is no story. Stories are about overcoming something. If there is no “overcoming” then there is no satisfaction to the reader at the end.

Here are The Triple-Os

Objective: The objective (some call it object, but I like objective better) is what the character wants. Once your character knows what s/he wants, s/he has an objective. Cinderella wants to go to the ball. Her sisters are going and she darned well wants to go, too.

Obstacles: Whatever stands in the character’s way of getting what s/he wants are plot obstacles. There's an old writer's axiom called the "rule of three" that tells us not to include more than three things in any one sentence. For hundreds of years three has been a magic number in our culture. Genies grant three wishes, Cinderella had two ugly sisters, there are usually three turning points or complications in a story plot, with the last one resulting in the crisis/bleak moment (some people call it the “black moment” and Carla Neggers calls it the “big gloom”), just before the resolution. So it is unwise to plan more than three obstacles in any plot.

Cinderella’s obstacles are not the ugly step-sisters, the way she is treated by her mean and jealous step-mother, or her father’s inability to see through his new wife. These are her obstacles:
    1. She has nothing to wear.
    2. She has no way to get there.
    3. She has a fairy-godmother (who solves the first two), BUT she must be home by midnight or the magic wears off!

As with most story plots, obstacles one and two are overcome, but obstacle three leads to what I like to call the bleak moment. In every story there is (or should be) that moment when it looks as if all is lost. For Cinderella, that moment happens when she’s in the Prince’s arms and the clock strikes 12.  She runs, for she knows that when the clock finishes striking, she will be standing there in rags. For Cindy, the party is over and she’ll never see the prince again. (Bleak moment)

Outcome: The outcome is simply how your story ends. Every story has an outcome. Some are happy, some sad, but whatever the outcome the main character or his or her circumstances should change because of it. In our sample story, the Prince finds the slipper. Truly smitten, he searches for Cindy until he finds her. And the Outcome, of course, is they marry and live happily ever after.

Not every story has a happy ending, of course, but there must be a resolution and the story will be better received if that resolution is satisfactory to the reader. Take the movie version of Titanic. (Another Cinderella, story plot.) Unlike Cindy, Rose is rich, but she is also a victim of her family and of her abusive fiance.  Here, quoted from the movie, is Rose’s problem statement:

"I saw my whole life as if I'd already lived it...an endless parade of parties and cotillions, yachts and polo matches...always the same narrow people, the same mindless chatter. I felt like I was standing at a great precipice, with no one to pull me back, no one who cared...or even noticed."-- Rose DeWitt Bukater

Rose’s Objective:     Is to escape the life she lives and a loveless marriage so that she can find freedom.

Rose’s obstacles:     1. Her family and fiancé who punish her when she doesn’t conform
            2. Depression that leads her to consider suicide.
            3. The ship’s sinking and Jack’s death (bleak moment)

Rose’s Outcome:    Though Jack dies, Rose is rescued and goes on.

Rose is Cindy in reverse. She’s a girl who has everything, money, position, and a millionaire fiancé. Yet Rose is severely depressed and feels confined by her life. Then she meets Jack, a free spirit.  Instead of going to the palace ball, they dance with the peasants in steerage. Even though Jack dies when the ship sinks, Rose goes on to dump her fiancé, and to live out all the dreams she and Jack had planned together. This is evidenced by her photo collection, Rose as a pilot, on a roller-coaster, riding a horse, and treading the boards as an actress.  Not a happy ending to the romance, but a satisfactory ending, because Rose has escaped from the narrow-minded people and her confined life, to find a fulfillment for herself.

Even though the hero dies, Titanic is still a romance. The ending, while sad, resolves the issues, and is satisfying to the reader.


Friday, May 9, 2014

Catching UP!


Books that went to press, or back to press this week:

MOONLIT BAY, by Elena Bowman
  
What is in an abandoned building on an uninhabited Island across Moonlit Bay that has been surreptitiously invaded by armed, unidentified entities who are helmeted, dressed in black survival suits and armed with laser guns?  


THE STORYBOOK,
by Elena D. Bowman
     
   Who hasn’t marveled at the sight of a child nestled in his or her grandparents arms as the reader takes that child into the kingdom of tigers, and dragons and bears, oh my! Watching as their grandchild’s eyes light up, drifting off into the domain of far away places, to distant parts of an exotic world, to the bottom of the sea,  and even to the far reaches of space.


EXIT PLANS, by Terry L. White

   What happens when a group of senior citizens decide to manage the way they are treated at the end of their long and useful lives? Will they go along with the state of the art status quo – or find new reasons to get up on Thursday mornings to discuss their possible fates?

 

No Galleys went out or went out this Week:

Mostly this week, I have been working on getting our SmashWords account up to date with all the new titles released since last fall, especially those that need revision since Shelley had left. Had to learn a lot of new stuff, not easy for an old dog like me. But hopefully things will go smoothly forward once we are all caught up.


Since May 30, last year, Shelley devoted all her time to getting Smashwords up and running, and I made some (much needed) changes in scheduling, doing the print books first and making the e-book files from the corrected print galleys. Though you wouldn't suspect it, based on results, that is going much faster. On May 30th, last year, we had more than a year's worth of work scheduled for two people. I am one person.

Beaucoup apologies and Bushels of Thanks to those of you who have waited so patiently for me to catch everything up. It may not seem like it, but I am a lot closer than I was last fall, despite the accounting delays.  I promise to catch everything up to date as soon as possible.

Until or unless sales pick up, we will not be able to pay Shelley to help. Since her educational grant did not come through, she has taken a full time job that is keeping her pretty busy. Shelley says "HI!" to everyone. We still love her and she still loves all of you and will miss hearing from you.  You can "friend" her on Facebook, if you miss her too much.






 
Work began, or continued, on the following titles: 
 
 MATTEO'S TREASURE, Morretti Men Series, Vol. 3, by Anna Dynowski
   Jet-setter Santino Moretti died and left the Triple-M property, worth nearly $25 million, to his three neglected sons, Micah, Marek, and Matteo, each born of a different marriage, and each unknown by the others. Before any one of them can inherit, he must take turns living on the farm for three months, then they must return and all three live together for a final three months. Half-brothers, city boys, and complete strangers, they face the biggest challenge of their lives: to put aside their distrust and bitterness and live together like a kind and caring family.
 
 
I HAVE A FRIEND ON JUPITER, Celine Rose Mariotti
   Paperback edition of the popular e-book.
 
THE DEPUTY, by C.M. Albrecht
   A dark mystery from popular author C.M. Albrecht

THE KIDNAPING OF SEN. ANDY THOMPSON, Adventures on Capital Hill, by Celine Rose Mariotti
   A political mystery, suspense, with a touch of humor. 
 
DOING DEAD MAN'S TIME, by Matthew L. Schoonover

 
    From the author who brought you the supernatural thrillers of The Arbiter series and the impossible mysteries of The Tornado Man series comes a new tale of supernatural suspense. Phil Talbot is in the here-after, awaiting judgment. He is given the opportunity to come back to the mortal plane and fix the one mistake that changed his supernatural fate.

THE DEPUTY, by C.M. Albrecht
   A dark mystery from popular author C.M. Albrecht
 
A VANISHING BREED,Volunteer Series, Vol. 2 by Tom Ward 
   The continued adventures of Medic 1260.

MINISTER'S SHOES, VOL. 2 by Celine Rose Mariotti

 
   Rev. Castle is back in another cozy mystery.

REWIND FORWARD, by Michael E. Field
  Another great mystery by popular author Michael E. Field.

BLEEDING HEARTS: Killian Kendal Mystery Series, Vol. 1

   Winner of the Stonewall Society's 2002 Pride in the Arts Literary Award in the Whodunit Category!


REAP THE WHIRLWIND: Killian Kendall Mystery Series, Vol. 2,  by Josh Aterovis.
   Suicide, or murder? That's the question in the second Killian Kendall mystery. Will Smith suspects murder when an old childhood pal drowns, and asks his friend Killian for help in solving the mystery.

 

TRUTH OF YESTERDAY,  by Josh Aterovis

ALL LOST THINGS, by Josh Aterovis

CHANGE  OF WORLDS, by Josh Aterovis 






 

Jack's News!

  by your bookstore cat,  gossip columnist, and feline friend. 

 
I have been a very quiet and good boy this week. Arline is very cranky when she is learning new stuff.  You'd think she'd just get over it!  After all, Shelley left her great directions so she shouldn't be confused. But then, confusion is her natural state.
 
 

Thursday, May 8, 2014

Tuna Salad with Apples and Almonds

In a prequel to Undercover Nudist, murder once more turns up at Oak Grove Nudist Camp. Suspect number one is Barbara Bassett, self-proclaimed thief—"not a robber, they're violent!" who turns up at the camp while looking for a place to hideout from a would-be partner in crime. Unaware that Barbara is a "nice" sort of thief who specializes in stealing things people don't really need—like art and jewelry—Ned Nackero and Carola Szegy befriend the self-proclaimed thief and cook for her while seeking a solution to the crime.

Tuna Salad with Apples and Almonds

Ingredients:

2  8 oz cans reg or 1 extra large 16 oz. can white albacore Tuna (Meat, Not chunky) Packed in water.
1 fresh ripe Red Delicious apple peeled, cored, and cubed
4 oz almond chips sliced lengthwise. (Available in most grocery stores
2 tbsp butter
Dash of salt.
1/2 tsp celery seed
1/2 cup Mayonaise
1/2 tsp. Salt

Directions:

Spread out Almond chips in a pie tin. Dot with butter, sprinkle with dash of salt. Toast under broiler until they begin to brown.  Don't let them burn, but browning enhances the flavor. Reserve.

Peel and cube Apple, place in zip lock bag to keep it from going brown.

Drain canned tuna and place in large bowl. Break apart with fork.

Add Mayonaise and mix.

Add apple and almonds, and seasoning mixing well.

You can add more mayonaisse if you like yours creamy, less if you like it dryer.

Make 5-6 sandwiches. Good on Wheat, Rye, or White, or on Kaiser rolls, buttered and toasted under the broiler.

I mix mine in a covered casserole, so it will keep if there are leftovers, though there usually isn't  much left.




Wednesday, May 7, 2014

Roasted Root Recipe


Canadian doctor and amateur genealogist Anne McPhail finds a murdered woman on the floor of the library in Culver's Mill's, a small town in Vermont. Jennifer Smith, the dead librarian was a gifted genealogical researcher who had been collecting information about her clients, and using it to blackmail them. She had extorted money from all kinds of people: local wealthy families; Russian criminals, and quiet, unassuming grandmothers. Anne takes a dangerous journey, retracing Jennifer’s steps through the small-town family histories find the murderer amongst her victims.


Roasted Root Recipe

Ingredients

8 to 12 slender carrots, peeled and trimmed
8 to 12 baby turnips, peeled
6 to 8 fingerling potatoes, scrubbed and cut lengthwise in halves
1 or 2 large parsnips, peeled, trimmed, and cut diagonally into 1-inch-thick slices
1 or 2 medium onions, trimmed, peeled and halved, each 1/2 cut into quarters
1 or 2 large beets, peeled and cut into thick wedges
1 or 2 kohlrabi bulbs, peeled and cut into thick wedges
1 celery root, trimmed and halved, halves cut crosswise into 1-inch-thick slices
1 whole head garlic, separated into cloves, unpeeled
2 or 3 sprigs fresh rosemary, sage, or thyme
Salt
Freshly ground black pepper
Extra-virgin olive oil

Directions

Preheat the oven to 400 degrees F.

Put all the vegetables and the herb sprigs in a large baking dish. Season well with salt and black pepper, drizzle generously with olive oil, and toss them with your hands to coat them evenly.

Put the baking dish in the preheated oven and cook, stirring the vegetables occasionally, until they are tender and golden brown, about 45 minutes. Serve the vegetables from their baking dish or transfer them to a platter to accompany a roasted main course.

Monday, May 5, 2014

Tighten?






Born to a poor Catholic family near Boston, Maggie Kearney rises from rags to riches, using those who can help, and discarding all who cannot. Eager to bury her poverty- stricken past with its shameful secret, she lets nothing stand in her way, not family, not love, and certainly not honesty.

Question from the e-mail: One of my readers didn't mark any mistakes, but just said said, "This story needs to be tightened." Got a handy wrench?  Or maybe an explanation?
 
Answer:  Run-on explanation is a problem that I surely have had, so should know how to fix it. Essentially it happened to me when I explained too much and didn't trust my readers to "get it." Can't say if that's what's happening to you, Cheryl. But it could be.

It most often happens when, on first or second draft, I put in too many prepositional phrases. In an effort to show or explain, it's only natural to use a lot of prepostions. But when there are too many, it can slow the pace and make the prose hard or tiresome to read.

Relax, this is easy to fix.  Use the search key to look for words like "because", "to", for", "so", "and", and "but", etc. Then check to see if the phrase is really necessary, or if you can combine or condense the sentence. Remember simple short sentences and paragraphs are often the best and clearest writing.

Especially, with "and" and "but" make certain the two elements are not just two ways of saying the same thing. As I said, this is one of my own personal failings. In revising I often add explanations. In my final pass, I try to cut out 10 to 15 per cent to eliminate my bad explanation habit.




Friday, May 2, 2014

Catching UP!

 NO Books went to press, or back to press this week:


Galleys that went out or went out again, this Week:


HIS SON, HER DAUGHTER, by Ludima Gus Burton.
    Destitute, single mother Nora Ames believes taking a job as nanny to a wealthy lawyer’s baby could be the answer to her financial problems. Her own daughter is hospitalized, but Nora can take the job temporarily. If her daughter’s health improves, then he can find someone else...

THE PROMISE, by Karen Rossi
   A romantic new title by an author who appeals to "New Adult" readers.  
 
MOONLIT BAY, by Elena Bowman
  
What is in an abandoned building on an uninhabited Island across Moonlit Bay that has been surreptitiously invaded by armed, unidentified entities who are helmeted, dressed in black survival suits and armed with laser guns? 

THE MORGENSTERN MURDERS: The Jonas McCleary Series, Vol. 2 by C. M. Albrecht
 
   In this sequel to The Sand Bluff Murders, former police chief Jonas McCleary has gone into business as a private investigator.

THE STORYBOOK, by Elena D. Bowman
     
   Who hasn’t marveled at the sight of a child nestled in his or her grandparents arms as the reader takes that child into the kingdom of tigers, and dragons and bears, oh my! Watching as their grandchild’s eyes light up, drifting off into the domain of far away places, to distant parts of an exotic world, to the bottom of the sea,  and even to the far reaches of space.

 
THE ALBEMARLE AFFAIR, by C. M. Albrecht

   When Corky Middleton thinks she may have found her birth mother, she hires Foster & Hall to investigate. Wow, does she open a can of worms! Instead of finding Corky's mother, the shamuses trip over a corpse, and that's just the humble beginning of an escalating case that climbs to the top of society in this twisted tale.

 
Work began, or continued, on the following titles: 
 
I HAVE A FRIEND ON JUPITER, Celine Rose Mariotti
   Paperback edition of the popular e-book.
 
THE DEPUTY, by C.M. Albrecht
   A dark mystery from popular author C.M. Albrecht

THE KIDNAPING OF SEN. ANDY THOMPSON, Adventures on Capital Hill, by Celine Rose Mariotti

   A political mystery, suspense, with a touch of humor. 

 MATTEO'S TREASURE, Morretti Men Series, Vol. 3, by Anna Dynowski
   Jet-setter Santino Moretti died and left the Triple-M property, worth nearly $25 million, to his three neglected sons, Micah, Marek, and Matteo, each born of a different marriage, and each unknown by the others. Before any one of them can inherit, he must take turns living on the farm for three months, then they must return and all three live together for a final three months. Half-brothers, city boys, and complete strangers, they face the biggest challenge of their lives: to put aside their distrust and bitterness and live together like a kind and caring family.
 
DOING DEAD MAN'S TIME, by Matthew L. Schoonover

 
    From the author who brought you the supernatural thrillers of The Arbiter series and the impossible mysteries of The Tornado Man series comes a new tale of supernatural suspense. Phil Talbot is in the here-after, awaiting judgment. He is given the opportunity to come back to the mortal plane and fix the one mistake that changed his supernatural fate.

THE DEPUTY, by C.M. Albrecht
   A dark mystery from popular author C.M. Albrecht

MINISTER'S SHOES, VOL. 2 by Celine Rose Mariotti
   Rev. Castle is back in another cozy mystery.

REWIND FORWARD, by Michael E. Field
  Another great mystery by popular author Michael E. Field.

BLEEDING HEARTS: Killian Kendal Mystery Series, Vol. 1

   Winner of the Stonewall Society's 2002 Pride in the Arts Literary Award in the Whodunit Category!


REAP THE WHIRLWIND: Killian Kendall Mystery Series, Vol. 2,  by Josh Aterovis.
   Suicide, or murder? That's the question in the second Killian Kendall mystery. Will Smith suspects murder when an old childhood pal drowns, and asks his friend Killian for help in solving the mystery.

 

TRUTH OF YESTERDAY,  by Josh Aterovis

ALL LOST THINGS, by Josh Aterovis

CHANGE  OF WORLDS, by Josh Aterovis 





 

Jack's News!

  by your bookstore cat,  gossip columnist, and feline friend. 

 For everyone worried about SmashWords listings ( greatly behind since Shelley left), Arline is learning how to do it. In fact, now that all the tax stuff is finished, and everyone is paid, she will be giving SW all her attention  until every listing is caught up! 
 
Boy, Easter was great. Hope you and yours had a good holiday. Everyone came to see me, and pet me, and treat me. I was my usual charming self, though I got nothing from the Easter Bunny, chocolate being very bad for people of the feline persuasion. 
 
Speaking of bunnies, at least three families have nests in our little copse behind the house. Surprising they didn't drown with all the  rain we had, but there are baby bunnies all over our back yard. I sniffed at their noses (very wiggly) but behaved myself like the gentlemen cat that I am. 
 
My sister, Spunky, chased them all over the yard, but couldn't catch any. Don't know what she thought she'd do with one, if she caught it. She should know Arline won't allow us to keep them in the house and we are definitely HOUSE cats. Besides we might have to share the food....

Didn't hear news from any of you this week.  Don't forget to share your gossip with Arline and me as we give free publicity, right here, every Friday, every week!
 

Thursday, May 1, 2014

Herring Roe - recipe

When Sue’s timid Aunt Alice meets and marries the charming Ben, Sue worries about her Aunt's happiness. Despite assurances that all is well, Sue cannot shake her misgivings. Ben’s overbearing and bullying behaviour and his obsession with spiders, fuels Sue's desire to uncover the truth.

Happy May Day!

Herring Roe on Toast

Ingredients
  • 1/2 cup anise hyssop flowers, chopped
  • 3 eggs
  • 1 cup sugar
  • 1/2 teaspoon vanilla
  • 2 cups flour
  • 1 teaspoon baking powder
  • 1/2 teaspoon salt

Read more at http://www.recipelion.com/Cookies-and-Bars/Anise-Hyssop-Flower-Drop-Cookies#29DwVJyAewFLyZr5.99
 Here on the Eastern Shore, Herring came every spring and still do, though not in the well-remembered numbers of the herring runs of yesteryear.

They are a very boney fish and the joke was the best thing  to do for a herring was nail it to a board, smoke it for three days, then discard the fish and eat the board. The point, of course, was that splinters were more easily managed than herring bones.

The reason everyone went out and caught as many herring as they could when they spawned, was the delicious roe. Local Indians pickled the fish (when the pickling brine was strong enough, the bones got soft like sardines), but while pickling happened on my great-grandfather's farm, people in town just threw away the fish and ate the roe. 

Our family tradition was always to have herring roe for Sunday breakfast when the herring made their way into our creek.

Ingredients

  • 1 lb herring, roes (what my Granny called "a good mess."
  • 1/2 cup seasoned flour
  • 1 tsp  cayenne pepper
  • 3 to 6 tbsp butter
  • 1 dash of lemon juice
  • 1 tbsp black pepper
  •  8 slices hot toast, made with  thick sliced white bread
To serve:
  •   8 even-sized lemon wedges
  •   4 sprigs parsley, chopped

Method

1. Put a pan of water on to boil. Add the herring roes, bring back to the boil, and then drain thoroughly. 

2. Mix the flour with cayenne and pepper in a pie tin.

3. Roll the roes in the flour until evenly coated.

4. Heat butter with the oil in a frying pan until the butter foams (DO NOT overheat the pan). Fry the roes in the fat, until golden brown on each side. Drain on kitchen paper and discard the fat left in the pan.

5. Melt the remaining butter in the pan, and as soon as it starts to foam, return the roes to the pan and squeeze over a touch of lemon juice. Turn the roes so that they are coated in buttery lemony juices.

6. Place the slices of toast on plates and spoon over the roes. Sprinkle with chopped parsley, dust lightly with a little more cayenne pepper, and tuck the lemon wedges in beside them. Serve immediately.